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God Planted A Rose Garden

God planted a rose garden.
Billions, actually:
Everyone has one.

But not everyone's life is
Full of hope.
There's not always
Gunna be roses at the end of the path.

God laid out a path for us
To each of our rose gardens.
And then he covered them
With stones.

We have a choice
Of what to do with these stones:
To throw them,
Stumble upon them,
Climb over them,
Or to build with them,
The theory being that
We can get to our rose gardens
If we get it right.

But once we finally get to
Our rose garden,
There's a chance that there
Won't be any roses.
Just weeds that need to be yanked
For the roses to grow and bloom.

And so we go back to the path,
Figure out what went wrong where,
And fix it.

And by doing so,
We are yanking the weeds
In our rose garden.

And when we finally return to
Our rose garden,
There could be roses.
Or there could be weeds still.
Not everyone will have roses.
Not everyone's lives are full of hope.

But at some point in time,
Everyone's garden will have weeds.

And God planted that garden
For a reason.
So, I was outside playing basketball talking to myself to try to get some things off my chest and something hit me: life sucks, it's always going to suck, and there's not always a happy ending. That last part reminded me of something Danny O'Donoghue said, "...not everybody's life is full of hope. There's not always roses at the end."* And then I thought, "Well, what if there is a path to this rose bush and it made me think of the quote by William Arthur Ward, “We can choose to throw stones, to stumble on them, to climb over them, or to build with them.” and this is the result.

I didn't mean to offend anyone with my religous views; it's just what I believe in. Sorry if you took offense.

I sound like a priest...is this what my deep, analytical mind sounds like? Sounds...strange, I admit.

Abrupt ending is abrupt. Didn't know how else to end it.

*Source: [link].
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This is quite a wonderful work. I liked reading through it. While it was straightforward the theme was good enough to keep me reading till the end and I loved every moment of it. The work technically is not very fabulous but the theme and the mixture of various ideas together is what makes this work so beautiful.

The way you mentioned that everyone has a Rose garden, meaning that everyone has a chance to find hope and a bright future but not everyone reaches that garden. One thing is to follow the steps, know where you are going and another is to reach there and get the right result. People at times think that they should get a reward no matter what they do.

That is not right, as is handled in this work. One has to realize and work on what they MIGHT have done wrong. If they believe they did nothing wrong... well they will probably have only weeds. Quite a nice work!
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skitskitpotter Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013  Student Writer
Whoa, I actually never read this one before! The analogy is really neat. And I like how you used ideas from O'Donoghue and Ward to write this. It's sad, and thoughtful, and meaningful. It's awesome when a poem has impact like that.

PS The atheist here is not offended by the religious references.
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dragonrider745 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013  Student Writer
:sob: You made my day, at least in part :) See, I like the ones with [some] brains, at least! ;P Yeah. Two completely different people with two completely different ideas...lets smash them together and see what happens! (My exact thoughts before I wrote this.)

PS Yay I was kind of worried about that. I didn't want to offend anyone c:
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Mysticstar875 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Student Writer
I don't think this needs a mature warning. It's a beautiful poem.
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dragonrider745 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Student Writer
Yeah, it took me a while to decide if it did or didn't. I might take it off... Thanks!
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Mysticstar875 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Student Writer
My dear... Ideological sensitivity would be like thoughts of suicide, self-mutilation, depressing topics, death, torture, racism, the Holocaust, Nazis, genocide, KKK, etc. It's troubling ideas that may offend people. I say God or other religions like that don't need to have that maturity warning. And I'm a Christian, so that's just my opinion ^^
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dragonrider745 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Student Writer
Ah...that makes sense. :) Thanks for clearing that up!
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Candace-in-Candyland Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Also, I think you're being too tough on yourself. I don't think you should have put a mature content warning on this due to its religious nature. If people are offended, let them be offended. It is your own personal beliefs and people ought to respect that and know that your views make you the person that you are. As Ray Bradbury conveyed, minorities that do not wish to see concepts that offend them can often bring about censorship.
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dragonrider745 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Student Writer
Yeah, I was debating the warning or not...it's just in my nature to try not to offend people, I guess, so I just threw it on.
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Candace-in-Candyland Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I really enjoyed it. Thank you!
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dragonrider745 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Student Writer
Glad you did! :)
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